Peer Reviews - Day 2

Julia

Argument: Astrology is disproved by science

Strength: Background/color setup is nice and fits subject ; pages appear to be easy to navigate

Improve: Looks like a lot of paraphrasing of a scientific article, is there other info that you can add that people not interesting in facts may want to read? Perhaps quick bullet points instead of paragraphs? Pictures?

Some headers are center-aligned, some are left-aligned

(Is the production meant to show a bias of why its harmful, to show both sides of the story, or to be un-biased entirely and just show introductory facts?) -- I didn't get a chance to read the whole thing, I'm not sure. Just make your point clear.

Olive

Argument: To show scenic/historical landmarks worth seeing in each state? To encourage travel

Strength: Very interesting, so much to look at!

Improve: Add border, maybe make California/Florida pictures not tilted -- I feel like Disney castles could be straight up (not angled) and would still be grand enough to take up the whole state and be recognizable, Give UP a different picture than Lower Michigan

Kim

Argument: For people to buy UP Unique Creation goods

Strength: well put together website

Improve: Like the links at the top of the page for navigation (strength), but with that, is the same necessary at the bottom of the page as well?

subheader "Local loves, now available to the public" could be worded better to be explicit

I think "about us" and "contact" tabs should be together, so the order of tabs reads "home, products, ordering, about us, contact" - seems to emphasize products and gives the tabs a better flow

Caitlin 

Argument: Politicians portray themselves in a specific physical manner as well as socially; body language/how presented is a subconscious of how we perceive people

Strength: Interesting insights, is non-biased to a political party. Like the "did you know..." under each subheader, very uniform. Organized

Improve: Where are these quotes from? Sources? (are they all from the same source?)
 Don't know the necessity of the "shoulds..."  are these your opinions?
hard to tell the difference between your opinions and the facts, break that up
why the circles around the faces?
flags need to be moved (also need to be made uniform size with each other)

Courtney

Argument: For people to take part in NaNoWriMo

Strength: For a writing activity, I love the use of whitespace/short sentences! The "incomplete-ness" has a certain appeal to it. Very nice mix of fonts,  typogoraphy is very well put together/appealing. Posters build on each other.

Improve: In the blue fonts, either use all lower-caps, or use proper capitalization, keep it uniform

Devin

Argument: To show how the truth behind how much money we spend on a dining hall meal compared to what we get for that money ; its better to eat off campus if you want to save money ; do we pay for convenience

Strength: nice comparative format, explains how to get the most of your food, survey was a beneficial addition, tumblr reaches  college-age demographic

Improve: for the pictures of food from tech, explain them like you did the culvers pics, don't know what that link is in your second posting ; don't know how tumblr works, but could you take off the timestamp on the posts?

Next

Argument: Create blog for sister?

Strength: Black is nice contrast from green, shows personality,

Improve: Change font, make side "about me" section wider or move to a different spot. What is the point of the blog? White title is hard to read

Also, the background is calming and relaxing, and so are the descriptions in the "about me", but the word "effervescence" is bubbly and exciting - don't know if those two descriptors match up with each other

Jane

Argument: we as a tech-savvy generation have a different mentality about ourselves/others/our relationships with others and we need to be aware of that when we interact with other generations

Strength: nice layout, nice background/text, text had enough time to read, good idea for a video, text movement was nice/moved movie along, easily relatable

Improve: Maybe add image to break up text towards end

Jana

Argument: for people to go to that landscaping service

Strength: love the handmade touches

Improve: "premier in lawn and garden care" text doesn't fit the organic flow of the image ; is there color in the grass? add color elsewhere for color advertisement or keep black and white for newspaper

Peer Reviews

Sarah

Major Argument: Provide publicity for Vocal Achord

Strength: Logos says name of group and both logos imply musical interest (clef signs and bar staffs) ; fonts imply whimsy

Develop: Perhaps give a sub-header under the logo saying "Michigan Tech A Capella" or something ; color for contrast

Charlie

Major Argument: Provide publicity/history/advertisement for Club Indigo - Why you should go

Strength: PP can hold its own, provides all the answers to questions people may have, is persuasive/informative ; I like that the font/background portray a 1920's feel, similar to the Calumet Theater.

Develop: Still needs photos, slides broken up

Steven

Major Argument: Don't pirate music

Strength: Very aesthetically attractive infographic, use of color emphasizes stats

Develop: only three statistics, maybe add more (i'm assuming you will because there's empty space at the bottom)

Where it says "the cost: 12.5 billion - annually to the us economy" does that mean money taken from the us economy? that line isn't clear

I'm not sure of the staggered lines in the "when caught pirating", I'd consider making those all aligned (or at least staggered at an even rate)

Cassandra

Major Argument: Join Greek Life at Tech for their leadership roles

Strength: Presentation has a nice flow, color gives contrast is easy to read

Develop: Some slides are too long to read in the time given ; the font is very "childish" (not in a demeaning way, but because it's handwritten) and I'm not sure if it implies the leadership position you're arguing for. Perhaps there's a different "fun" font that shows the lighthearted side of Greek Life without compromising your respectability of professionalism/leadership?

Challenges

My project is coming along really nicely, and I'm learning more about photo manipulation as I go along, but here are some challenges I've come across during my project so far:

The editing is taking longer than I expected. I had hopes of creating three different photo before/after series, I'm putting the final touches on the first one when I'm in the lab today, and then I'll begin my second one. Depending on how long my second series takes, I might have to cut it down and leave it with the two.

I'm not really sure how I want to host my presentation. The photo series' are either going to be displayed as well, a series (with one photo at a time), and I'm also contemplating turning them GIF's, so after my presentation, they can be housed as a picture family together. But, since my digital media artifacts are pictures, I'm not sure how I want to present them. Most people are putting together websites, and I thought about making a tumblr with my photos, but I feel that if I made a webpage, it would need a lot more substance than what I have. Maybe a solid powerpoint is all I need.

(Just kidding, as I was writing that paragraph, I decided I'm going to make a tumblr page as planned, but then just make one really long essay-like entry. I had previously worried about the fact that I was going to need to create several, if not dozens, of tumblr entries, and I was struggling with how to present my info in any particular order in that fashion, but if I just put it as one long post, It'll be a great host for my argument.)

Design Plan

Statement of Purpose: I would like to show how skewed photos can become from when they were originally taken, through forms of editing and manipulation, and to show how these altered photos can create a "hyerreality" for people (namely young women) to base their realities in and around.

Audience: Anyone who doesn't know what drastic edits can be placed onto a photo to alter it, especially high school/ college age women who value personal beauty as self-worth.

Exigency: There exists this notion that the only way to be beautiful is to be skinny and flawless, as seen in celebrity photographs and magazines. In reality, there isn't a person who actually looks like the photos, those photos have been doctored and altered to the point where the model can sometimes become unrecognizable. However, people who take in these doctored photographs don't know they are altered and base their own beauty on the altered, unrealistic and often unattainable appearances of the models.

Audience's "fitting response"/ Potential Change: I would like to see the audience realize how "fake" these photos are; and to be able to recognize and separate the hyperreality of doctored images from our actual reality.

Strategies: Right now, through finding before/after pictures of celebrities, finding statistics on alteration, and showing some before/after photos that I will be creating.

Medium: I will be setting up a blog that I can post onto in a "timeline" like manner, with my postings in order of my arrangement.